Hey sweetie pie! good work 4 a first back hey :) I hate it when u like ur poem but there are just some parts that r like crap... and others ur like whoo they're cool.. anywhoo. keep working on it girly. *hugs*
It was good. i really liked it a lot. but there was one line i didnt like at all
I put one foot forward feeling gay
it just doesnt fit right and i dont like the world "gay" i think it makes it sound weird in the poem. that might be just me, but i think you should change it. other than that its fine and its a really good poem 5/5
Hey babe! Not bad! It's good! The only thing was the grammar typos. Everyone makes 'em, but I hate it when no one tells me!! Well, one was "Those times has changed". It was a bit difficult to read, but it may not have been a mistake at all. I know it SURELY seems like something I would do for either sound effect or imagery, but I'm a weirdo! Anyway, 4/5, and keep it up! STAY SHARP!