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by Independence Forever Feb 19, 2007
Special events /
I'm sick of all drama, built around fireworks today
didn't you know it was revolution that gave us this way?
it was not the sound of crackle, but the boom of cannon fire
for while you play with sparklers, our nation's need was dire
Adams, Jefferson, and Washington, fighting to the bitter end
they only cared about freedom, with Britain they lost many a friend
but now we play with our toys not knowing or i dare say caring
that our ancestors died for us, so that it would be toy guns we be sharing
when Francis Scott key wrote "the bombs bursting in air"
he wasn't writing about pretty little fireworks with it's flare
Lincoln, Roosevelt, Truman, our hero's do not end there people
and do not think they are limited to your lit up steeple
i fear we've forgotten, the dream is no more
but play with your fireworks, forget our bloody score
by Jenni Marie
Now this...this is amazing.
The meaning behind this piece was beautiful..imagery created was breathtaking, really created vivid pictures for me.
I thought the flow was good throughout except for "with britian lost many a friend."
It just sounds of to me. Maybe try With Britian, lost a friend?" or something similar?
But apart from that, this was beautiful.
Thts awesome---i agree
Another grea t write of your, anbd your so rigt, holidays are now alll about what people can get out of them, not about what started them
The title instantly caught my attention ^_^
You're right too. We often forget the true significance of holidays. 5/5
I really liked this one, actually better that, fight for inependence! Very good David! kudos!
your slave also,
~luv ya bunches~