Walking threw the shadows
To avoid the sun
Sounding off the alarm and firing the arrows
Looking down the barrel of the gun
Realizing the truth,catching up with reality
Disappointment floods your mind, in misery
Where do we see the turning point?
Did you go over the limit by smoking that joint?
When is the time that we stop and think?
When do we realize we are standing on the brink?
I don't want to drown in the watter, I don't want to sink
Can you help me find the path to the missing link?
Every time I look back, I always seem to regret,
Because temptation is still ready and it's set,
The actions I choose I may never forget,
That's why I don't want to give up, I don't believe in forfeit,
If I can choose to resist, the tests that layeth ahead,
I can live on fully, and finally disperse from the red,
This is something i definitely and always will shame,
I cant let it out on others,This time I will take the blame,
I wrote this poem very fast, bout 30-45 min,
Fast poem for me anyway,
I hope you enjoy it, This poem isn't one I'd think that I'd post on here, But I just felt like writing and posting a new poem,
I really loved this poem. So manyu touching words. Although, the structure wasn't that good. You should maybe try to put the whole poem into stanzas that can be easily understood. Still a very good poem though!
I really enjoyed the first stanza of this piece, it was emotive and strong - but after that the poem kind of fell apart for me. The message was a little unclear, and it just seemed more like a brainstorm than a piece of art. The thoughts expressed were clever, but overall I don't think this fit well. You have potential, keep writing.
Very good poem but I dont think it is the joint you need to worry about it is your friend or who ever your talking about becouse I'm like a 4th generashion stoner an it's done nothing but good for me but hay I guess weed has differant effacts on people we'll any way keep writing if you get a chances I would love it if you could comminte some of my poems
I'm finally commenting on one of your poems.. I may have been too lazy to comment your other ones, but this really deserves to be commented and I'm rating it a 5, it rhymed extremely well and I love it's message.