Comments : Saddened Your Soul [Acrostic]

  • 10 years ago

    by Jackie Marie

    Good job hun. I think you did a really good job. The flow of it was excellent. Nice job on the rhyming. Keep it up. =]

  • 10 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    You are a very talented poet that writes from the heart in a cultural colloquial style
    and I enjoyed reading this.

  • 10 years ago

    by xo kisses xo

    Wow! this was really good. i loved it! you are an awesome writer. 5/5

    xo kisses xo

  • 10 years ago

    by Nick who Plays Pool

    Very creative, you use very clever words and you went with an acrostic poem which it is always good for a little change. You had a good flow that was carried from beginning to end keeping its durability. The words you choose were clever as I said before and they were well chosen to fit the story you were telling. You followed the double acrostic's rules and kept the poem still sounding good which it is important thus you were able to create a very well written piece. Well done Laura, superb poem and I hope to see more as superiorly written as this piece of work.

    Peace, Poetry & Power,

    Nick

  • 10 years ago

    by Zeus

    It was a really nice acrostic. I liked how it flowed and the message you tr to show. Good job. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    I loved this poem alot. I found it to be creative and interesting. I particulary love this style it is one of my favorites, and for you to do a double shows how well you truely write. Your word choice is amazing, strong, powerful and emotion which you portrayed throughout this entire poem beautifully. This poem sounded great the flow was truely flawless I didnt find it to go off track at all. Well done on this I have found you to be quite talented just by reading one of your poems. 5/5 definitly ~mel

  • 10 years ago

    by David

    Great tribute to him, and well use of a certain technique. well done.

    5/5 David

  • 10 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    Great vocabulary and because of your well thought out use of enjambament the lines seemed to flow well into each other, something i find is rare in acrostics.

    i liked your word choice and thought you stuck to the structure amazingly well.

    great read.
    xx

  • 10 years ago

    by Espoirfailed

    On a second read, i realised a few mistakes in the structure, the 5th line ends in d instead of e.

    the 14th and 12th line also end in the wrong letter.
    xxx

  • 10 years ago

    by RavishingEruption

    I didn't really like the last line. It takes the cuteness of the poem away and makes it more sexual. The rest was great. 4/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Fsams

    Laura sweetie this is superb. Morethan adhering to the acrostic rule you have managed to keep a flawless flow in it. Sweetie your poem is outstanding with great lexical power and unique style. Tc

    With love
    Fsams

  • 10 years ago

    by Richard Machado

    It's cute, and sad, I guess. And, well thought out. I wonder if I can give you one suggestion...

    The O in SOUL, should be, I think, a 'Oh,' instead of 'Or.'

    Besides that it's a great poem, I always have trouble with acrostics, and you seem to have nailed it.

    Really,
    I
    Give it
    Half
    Ten

    Out of half Ten! Wooh!
    Nicely done!... How was that? xD lol
    !
    Yours truly,
    ~Richi~

  • 10 years ago

    by luv Shelbz luv

    This is a deep fantabulous poem!!! I am so gonna add this to my favs. I loved it from the 1st wrd!!!

  • 10 years ago

    by NeroB00

    Nice

  • I loved this acrostic.
    I loved all the words,
    they fit perfectly in my thoughts.
    5/5
    Take care, love.

    -Heather

  • 10 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    As acrostics go they can be very testing and strainging to use words that really would love to!

    anyway 4.5 i thought this was very good keep it up :)

  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Great choice of words, I personally don't write acrostic poems, but I know how hard it may be to write a acrostic piece good as this one.
    Keep up! 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by The Lonely Rose

    Yet again very good word choice and its very creative..a 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Sydney

    Your wording is once again great. Cant get enough of it! : ]]

  • 10 years ago

    by XXTruthSeekerXX

    I love the simple acrostic style. There's not much to say but keep up the good work. You're a great romantic poet.