this is lovely. It's got a swell flow to it that is only interupted in terms of syllable count on the first line of the last stanza. I know how you re reading this line, and I can see it working...but it's not tandem with the rest of the poem, which has a uniform flow and count.
It's a good piece, lots of physical imagery that helps to pull the reader into the hert of the poem, which is how you are feeling in your body and mind..
Ps, where is the stanza about dreaming of scottish boys?...You forgot that section...so only a 4 out of 5 for you.