This was an excellent poem. It was elegantly mature; I loved the twisting of the feeling of security, it was quite intruiging (It might just be me who got this feeling :P) Anywhoo, the overall design of the poem plucked all the right strings in my own memories. I, simply, could identify with the poem, and I think it's purely beautiful, and would be flawless if it wasn't for the flow of the 8th line.
Awesome write you created here, "Sweet Fragility" (since I don't know your name)
Incredible poem, metaphors are great and it is very unique. You created superb atmosphere and every line is filed with emotions. I don't prefer love poetry but this one is amazing! Well done! I really enjoy in it.
What a superb piece of art. The repetition of the first line kept the piece strong and interesting -- really held a nice structure. Your vocabulary was, again, great, and the idea is executed wonderfully.
You ooze talent.
Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;
hmm that line reminds me alot of a poem I wrote same few ending words..
I really did enjoy this piece I must say it was quite beautiful. Sweetly written. Well done on this one keep up the great work. ~Mel
I love this. It was absolutely amazing.
The repetition of that first line was great & the metaphors used within the poem was spectacular. The flow was flawless and I have no complaints on this one. You did an amazing job. :) Overall: 5.5 ---- Stephanie Lynn .+.