Comments : Lament of a Dying Butterfly

  • 10 years ago

    by Richard Machado

    This was an excellent poem. It was elegantly mature; I loved the twisting of the feeling of security, it was quite intruiging (It might just be me who got this feeling :P) Anywhoo, the overall design of the poem plucked all the right strings in my own memories. I, simply, could identify with the poem, and I think it's purely beautiful, and would be flawless if it wasn't for the flow of the 8th line.

    Awesome write you created here, "Sweet Fragility" (since I don't know your name)

    ~Richhiieeeee

  • 10 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    What a beautiful piece of poetry. The repetition of the first line was very powerful and brilliant. It made the piece more meaningful and wasn't overbearing. The flow was wonderful as well. 5/5

    marcella

  • 10 years ago

    by Nix

    Incredible poem, metaphors are great and it is very unique. You created superb atmosphere and every line is filed with emotions. I don't prefer love poetry but this one is amazing! Well done! I really enjoy in it.

  • 10 years ago

    by Shauna

    Amazing Poem!! Brilliant written and creative.. I really enjoyed reading this.. and very good flow as well! Great Poem!

    5.5**
    <33

    And Thank You For Your Lovely Comment =)

  • 10 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    Wow this is the best metaphor I have read in a love poem for quite a while. It seems to reflect the reality that the beauty of romance is usually brief indeed

  • 10 years ago

    by Jenna

    This is SOOOOOOOOO AMAZING! the words were perfect and the flow was perfect to! the emotions ugh...all i can say is AMAZING! its beautiful!
    KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!

    BabyGurl

  • 10 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    Excellent rhyming. I loved how you repeated the first line. It really puts enphasis on it. Plus it's an awesome line/title. 5.

  • 10 years ago

    by Christina Yap

    This a very creative and beautiful piece. I loved the flow of the poem. The repitition of the first line in each verse, it created a sense of perfection as well as complition. 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Veamm

    Excellent!

    for this one..its very deep and a thinking poem maybe, your vocab is great..descriptive and and so expressive..your have transform youir thoughts into art..its great!

    keep it up!

  • 10 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Oh wow.. another beautifully penned written piece by you. I really love the use of repetition in this poem, the flow was flawless. And again your word choice is amazing.

    5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Alexandra Jade Brewer

    Well done, just amazing. The flow the idea. You have used language in all of your poems that is just so strong. You express your emotion in such a talented way. Great Job!

  • 10 years ago

    by ANDRE AQUINO

    I like this one, it is really greatly written and deep. 5/5 for you keep up...

  • 10 years ago

    by Lisa

    Good flow, amazing poem. I loved it. Great job.

  • 10 years ago

    by Andrew Morton

    ...death...lament.....and butterfly, i love how you threw that contrast in there...this was an incredible piece, you have amazing form and your word choice was killer, great job on this!

  • 10 years ago

    by mnemosyne

    What a superb piece of art. The repetition of the first line kept the piece strong and interesting -- really held a nice structure. Your vocabulary was, again, great, and the idea is executed wonderfully.

    Amazing job!
    You ooze talent.
    Take Care,
    Smiles,
    *N

  • 10 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    Oh wow! I love this poem. Your wording you used was so so strong and the flow and repeativity (SP?) of "
    Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;" was amazing. Great work!

  • 10 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    This was a great poem written so greatly.
    it shows that you have a great talent, keep up the great work.

    a 5/5 from me as you truly deserve it

  • 10 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Lament of a dying butterfly -- even the best shall fall;

    hmm that line reminds me alot of a poem I wrote same few ending words..
    I really did enjoy this piece I must say it was quite beautiful. Sweetly written. Well done on this one keep up the great work. ~Mel

  • 10 years ago

    by broken reflection

    Such a beautiful poem... enjoyed every stanza, every word, every letter lol 5/5 keep it up

  • 10 years ago

    by Stephanie

    I love this. It was absolutely amazing.
    The repetition of that first line was great & the metaphors used within the poem was spectacular. The flow was flawless and I have no complaints on this one. You did an amazing job. :) Overall: 5.5 ---- Stephanie Lynn .+.