Submission date : 2013-06-25
Poet on the Piano ( F P C D )
This was a powerful and emotionally building piece. I could feel the intensity when you first mention the question you were asked, and then having it repeated later on in the poem shows that release of emotion, of desire to have freedom. I really felt just a tiredness at the final lines....like a last plea to be heard that a part of you is ready to try and fight for yourself, and that's scary...anything could happen then.
An expressive piece from simply stating your lifelessness then finalizing it to the reader that there is no chance at freedom.
Don't give up yet, look ahead.
Richard Roque ( P C )
I wish you married me instead. I am very hurt that you chose him over me. I would never hurt you. I want you to have your freedom and would never fight with you. I will try my hardest to never fight with you and we would talk our problems through and use prayer and faith to work through issues. I love you!...... I am sadden that you do not send me the poem first like you use to do before : (