I won't accept your crown.

by Poet on the Piano   Feb 4, 2015


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i refused you because i knew you,

the enemy working to convince me

this is all i am - blood and metal.

you hunted me in solitary rooms

where i could find no creative escape.

i could not scream when thoughts

choked me tight, urging me to drown

to be the still dark.

this fight is personal yet still affects many

as i never expected my kingdom to bow down;

your throne cannot stand forever.

i will not let you consume my flesh

my will...

i am not your successor.

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Freewrite 2/04/15 @ 7:10 PM

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  • 9 years ago

    by Brittany Klein

    I love the meaning behind this piece. I do suggest that the capitals get put in where they are needed. Unless it is meant to be that way. =]

    It also had a good flow and smooth reading style. Great Job!

    *~BrittBratt~*

  • 9 years ago

    by Brittany Klein

    I love the meaning behind this piece. I do suggest that the capitals get put in where they are needed. Unless it is meant to be that way. =]

    It also had a good flow and smooth reading style. Great Job!

    *~BrittBratt~*

  • 9 years ago

    by Sunshine

    You in particular, I find myself in many of your poems, how very sad yet not dramatic at all. I really love the fact that you expressed the pain you went through without over dramatizing the situation, but rather creating a scene.

    The content is well structured, my only problem was all the little "i" especially at the start of the poem, but perhaps you've intended this.

    I love poems that end with a tone of challenge or strength. Although you've went through this domination of what that person wants you to be, or trying to shape you, you still are trying to stand up for yourself.

    I love your title, it does connect strongly to the poem, if its this how you want me to be, you have to know that I am aware of it and always have been, and I wont let you consume me, ergh I love that character :]

    Amazing poem, really!