by Sandra D
Submission date : 2006-11-11
Last edit : 2006-11-22
MiSsUnDeRsToOd TeArS ( F P C D )
Great job on this. The emotion was great and your poem ended very good... not that killing yourself is something good but the way u ended it. In my opinion its great. 5/5 keep up the good work
Marcus ( F C D )
I like it
but it feels like you should write it in 3rd person to make it more realistic
like your tellin a story
xxSnow AngeLxx ( F C D )
Wow...the ending was sure twist..atleast i did'nt expect it to end tht way.....it was beautiful....filled with emotions sad n emotional...n penned properly.
but i do think it'd hv been better expressed wth the usage of third person..kp writing!
it has it's own beauty!
Sam Mayo ( F P C D )
Your poems are so sad some of mine are like that. i write down what i want to feel and all the horrid things that are in my mind this makes me fell better because if i want to have a good day i write and upsetting poem that would get rid of all my worry, anger, greif, anyway this poems remined me of some of mine:~)Sam
Lost and Confused ( F P C D )
I love this poem. Its not your fault... such a great concept that everyone can relate to! The way it was written was very effective. But at the same time... it almost made me feel like I wanted to save you. Being able to fill a reader with emotions like this, ... I'm speechless. 5/5