Golden Miracles

by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA   Feb 12, 2008


I never thought this day would happen,
It all seems too good to be true.
Everytime I looks at you sleeping next to me,
I get happy to have you here.

You're my bundle of joy,
The face that brightens my day.
With your little hazel eyes,
I know you understand everything I say.

Nothing in this world matters more than you,
Because you were my miracle baby.
I'll love you from this day on,
And never will we depart.

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  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    AWW congratulations!
    I cant wait till i have a child so i can feel, and write something like this!

    "Everytime I looks at you sleeping next to me"
    you need to take the "s" off of "look"

    but this was very sweet. again, conratulations.
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Dark Demise

    Lots of feeling and emotion in this poem, kind of short though, and could use some better flow,

    Not really required though, cause I see this poem more of a writing just about how you feel more then a poem, Which there is nothing wrong with that, I do it all the time!, I actually like them more because it's somthing I can personally relate to more then I can then when I have to pick special words that rhyme with eachother and make it all flow well, (which I can't do anyways but when i try lol)

    Keep up the good work,

  • 16 years ago

    by JEFF

    I never thought this day would happen,
    It all seems too good to be true.
    Everytime I looks at you sleeping next to me,
    I get happy to have you here.

    I think somebody gave you a 4.0 for this, (l(looks) shoud be (look) but i loved it and gave it 5/5

    Great write. beautiful daughter :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    This is such a sweet poem
    there are some places where rhyme is not perfect, in my opinion, but anyways it's really beautiful
    :)

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    I think that this piece should appear in the love poems section. Anyways, the first stanza wasn't as good as the rest of the poem. It didn't have rhymes in it and the flow was rocky there. As for the rest, the flow and rhymes were just fine. Nice work 4/5