Four Tickets, Three Straws and One Kiss

by Wallace   Feb 18, 2008


Hurry, hurry the doors are closing
Where's the popcorn, where's the drink
Excuse me Sir, is that seat taken?
Shhh, be quiet the movie's starting

There we were, the four of us,
John, Lucy, Tom and I
John and Lucy were in the middle
While Tom and I were near the aisle

Tom was cute with gorgeous hair
And his faced was full of lovely freckles
He always smiled when we talked
And sent me pretty love letters

I turned around and looked at him
And there he smiled at me again
He took my hand and held me close
Gave me a kiss above my nose

There we sat arm in arm
Cuddling sweetly, filled with love
It was as if my dream came true
O' what a lovely night it was

The movie ended half past eight
Then we all went our separate ways
But it was a night I'll never forget
When my love and I joined in fate

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni

    This was a very cute poem. I liked the way it was written, but there were a few flow problems where I had to stop and re-read a line. Overall, I loved it! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by vintage darling

    This poem is very cute and quirky.

    The movie ended half past eight
    Then we all went our separate ways
    But it was a night I'll never forget
    When my love and I joined in fate

    was my favourite stanza.
    keep it up
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    Omg this is so sweet
    a very nice story and the flow and rhythm and everything is incredible. written very simply, but in such a sincere way!
    And this beginning "hurry, hurry, doors are closing!" makes the poem so dynamic and joyful and positive plus it is heart-felt especially last 3 stanzas
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    I loved how you put me in the sitution in the beginning ... it was easy to follow. The descriptions were good and the flow was okay. I think you could say much more here and it seemed unfinished to me. That just my opinion. All in all good job. *4/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by StonedGooberz

    This truly belongs in love poems, it was wonderfully written nice job 5/5

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