She Fights For Her Life

by Michelle18   Feb 19, 2008


She lost her job,
She lost her house.
She lost her kids,
She lost her spouse.

On the streets,
She fights for her life.
She prays to God,
That she'll be alright.

No money for food,
She eats out of the garbage.
She doesn't know what to do,
She tries her hardest.

She begs for change,
From anyone that walks by.
They just look at her strange,
God, she wishes to die.

She wishes one day,
She'll have the perfect life.
Never have to run away,
And never have to strife.

But she'll never have the life she had before,
But she still continues to fight.
She just wants a little more,
She prays for a warm place to sleep at night.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    You could definatly feel the sadness in this poem that this girl had no money, no job, ect. ect. and how sad that was. But, I must say you really overused the words she and she'll. I know you were just trying to make a point, state things, and move on with the poem.. but I think you used them like every line.. which didn't really make the poem have a nice flow. But, I thought you did a good job on this, but maybe with less words like she and she'll you would have a masterpiece. 4/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by she

    This is so sad because you know it's true for many out there, good job

  • 16 years ago

    by Annabel

    I think this is a very blunt poem, in a good way, if you get me. It doesn't try to cover the reality of what's happened to this person, it tells the truth and for me this poem shows emotion for it. I wouldn't say I like it personally, but it is a good poem. 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    You lost me there at the end. I think some parts seemed forced to me and the language you use was too simple in my opinion. You could have taken this topic into so many levels and truly told a heartbreaking story but this was just okay. I think you could add some more emotion to it. It was a good read but would be better with some more depth. *4/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    I think you have a good idea, but I think you ended it a little suddenly, maybe add another stanza where she finds something? It need something to tie itself together. I also didn't care for the flow. The first stanza is a lot shorter than the others. Overall, I think you have a very solid idea, but you need to tie it together better.

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