Omg! I really really liked the message in this one. Try to help others whenever you can. I love helping people, that's just my personality. I hate it when something is wrong or someone is sad. I think the flow and rhymes and stuff were good. I liked the repetition with "what if". I love poems that make people think and this was definitely one of them. Amazing poem! Keep up the good work!
Power. Hmm, I don't think it's such a positive thing. It brings corruption, no matter how good you think the person is. That's why I enjoy the movie "Lord of the Rings". It really defines the meaning of "power". Although people would use "power" for good, it has it's own way to turn it evil. It's what I think anyway, well for TOO much power. Just the right amount is good enough.
What if you had the power
to help everyone in need?
To take the hands of those who've failed,
and help them to succeed?
Everyone has that power ... not to help everyone but do what they can, yet so many opt to turn a blind eye. So very sad
What if you took this power
and put it to good use?
What if you made a difference
instead of always an excuse...
After reading all 4 stanzas I knew there was something deep and true coming in the ending stanza. And upon reading it I said to myself "excellent voice in the ending stanza"
You have penned this write with the love and compassion that lays within your heart and it shines in the 2 ending lines hun.
Bravo! ~claps~ excellent message you've woven into this write.
Well done, excellent read