Grey Twilight

"Forgotten but not yet gone."

Somehow these lines are rather sad.........to choose to forget while still existing........infact the whole poem is saddening ......am picturing a man deprived of the fuel to nudge a man further: happiness! Loved the poem through it all.

That was very well put
awesome job
take care

Wow... I could litterly sense and feel the darkness, gloom, and sorrow. I must say that I was drawn in to this piece and my emotions were held captive by the picture that you painted.

I cannot even begin to express all the different ways a reader could see this, but that is what makes this piece so great.

To be honest, I could not even offer any advice on this... I was so consumed that any critiquing flew right out the window.

Well done.... very powerful!

~~Sher

Wow...
This is amazing... Remarkable piece, filled with deeply touching sadness.

- Dreams of waking and suffering once again.-
- Demon and monster the living chant.-
- His story ignored but hated within your eyes.-
^^^
Mind- blowing lines, so powerful and outstanding.

Fantastic poem, truly greatly written, filled with dark atmosphere.
Keep up!

Wow. This is very well written.
You're such a wonderful poet.
I loved it!
Keep writing. You have loads of talent!
5/5

-Ally