by Onoitsmandie Feb 27, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
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Razor blade Kisses |
by AmberSherrellxxIve Been Sitting Here Trying To Find Myselfxx
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Oh and one more thing while I'm thinking about it.You shouldn't capitalize 'kisses' it throws the flow off. |
by AmberSherrellxxIve Been Sitting Here Trying To Find Myselfxx
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It was rather short but, good.I think tha you should capitalize the beginning of ever sentence though to make the poem seem more organized.In the first stanza, last line, I think you should change 'nothing' to "nothing's".In your last stanza,first line, you should put a comma after 'life' to better the organization again.Just a few suggestions but good poem though. |
by Ariana Mejia
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Good job:)it was a great choice with words.. |