Egoism

by Niels   Mar 5, 2008


I live in this palace made from marble and gold,
It's huge and wonderful like a fairytale being told.
I love to dance down the endless decorated halls,
My own beautiful pictures hanging on the stainless walls.

As I hop down the red carpet I smell that I successed,
I'm just one of these people that have been blessed.
Like a drunken angel I feel nothing but perfected,
When I look in the mirror I see a man that is respected.

Yet I feel like a king on an empty throne,
Owning all this magnificent stuff but left alone.
There is no shiny trumpet that get's blown,
I can't hear the sound of a magical tone.

I'm abandoned with my own pathetic grief,
My own gluttonous ambition is my stealthy thief.
My feet bound in chains, despair haunting near,
Down my cheeks I feel a petrified tear.

I'm trapped in this cage of life, the key forever lost,
Happiness knows two sides, like a penny being tossed.
Yet I'm the losing king of chess, doomed to be,
Untill someone hears my call and sets me free.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Natalie

    Wow, this poem is extremely interesting! Firstly let me commend you for your rhyming, it is absolutely flawless. I really like that you changed the rhyming scheme from stanza to stanza as I felt it was effective.

    Secondly, I also truly enjoyed the imagery in your poem. I felt like I was reading a damned fairytale from the very beginning and that made it charming! From the "decorated walls" to the "losing king of chess" I could envision every word you were saying! Spot - on imagery. Well done for that.

    Finally, what got to me most about this poem is the sincere and gentle message that it brings forth. Money is not everything. We have been told this millions of times and refuse to believe it! So you tackle a very humane subject here and do it so in an extremely enchanting way! I loved it!

    Also, if you get a chance, have a look at my poems and let me know what you think!

    Keep writing!

    Natalie

  • 16 years ago

    by Kim

    One of your best poems, in my opinion.
    It contains a very important message and I love your choice of words.

    Keep up the great work. ^^
    Thumbs up!

  • 16 years ago

    by Hebe

    That was a great poem
    Discribes perfectly a person with such egoism..but also it has two sides..
    Like you said:

    " I'm trapped in this cage of life, the key forever lost,
    Happiness knows two sides, like a penny being tossed. "

    Those lines were great!
    Your flow and word choice were very good also.
    Well done!
    Take care
    Xx

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