I'lll be your wind

by Lizaveta   Mar 6, 2008


Darling, you mean everything to me,
You're my shining sun
That lightens my world
And fills it with glee,
That is only one.

Darling, you are higher then the clouds
And you shine so bright
To lighten the world
From sky to the ground,
Your smile is a ray of light.

Darling, you warm me when I'm cold,
With your brightly flaming heart.
Just I beg, don't burn it, honey.
You can warm the whole world
But you're with me tonight.

Darling, I promise I'll be your wind
When it's too hot in the middle of the day,
When you need breeze, my Mr. Sunny
I'll blow any sorrow away
I promise, sweetheart, I will be your wind.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Melvin LeVeque

    Woa...i dont know what to say...but woa nice poem =]
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by StonedGooberz

    "When you need breeze, my Mr. Sunny
    I'll blow any sorrow away" im sorry im not at good at comments as you are but ill try my best. the above quote from your poem is the only correction i found your poem might need and thats only putting "a" in " you need breeze" other then that i loved the flow and that display of emotion rivals another good poet i found on this website nice job-
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by noha

    Very sweet, you write it in good way and its nice way to write it using the wind and sun, i like it

  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    This was a very sweet poem. But the flow was incredibly rocky, mainly because you made it rhyme in some parts, and not in other parts.
    I also think the third stanza could be used without beginning with the word "Darling".
    and on this line
    "Just I beg, don't burn it, honey."

    I think it sounds better as

    "I just beg, please don't burn it honey."

    Just my thoughts. I think you could add a little bit more to it, so it would give the ending a much bigger bang. ya know?

    4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Forever

    Wow, this is an astonishing poem! The concept was brilliantly beautiful! And it was very well-written! 5/5 for sure.

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