My Two Cents , Plus Another Twenty - Eight .

by ABake   Mar 19, 2008


Sometimes , we trick ourselves into believing things are not real . And we always find out too late and a few drinks later ; But that never stops us from believing , and we of course - keep trying at it . Which allows us to get our heartbroken ; But tell me , is it worth the time believing in nothing but a mere fantasy ? Still , she chases after him . She just can ` t help it . . .

Still , she allows him to break her heart - Kiss her like she truly matters , but within moments he will walk away as if there lips embracing meant as much to him as that guy who took his order at Burger King a few hours back . [ Sighs ] There she goes again ; Her self - worth decreasing with each second that passes by on your pretty little Rolex . But , it isn ` t like brand matters . I forgot , you like them home grown ;

Keep giving her already weak hopes another tug . But - be careful , she might just fall from that pretend thrown you so falsely placed her upon when you swore you loved her ; But do not worry , I don ` t think she would know the difference - In your eyes , she has no feelings . And can feel nothing . But it is only to you . . .

Well , sweetheart , I would like to share my two cents with you - Actually , make that thirty . If you do not mind I have a lot I would like to say : You laugh as if it is funny , when really , it is the saddest thing I have seen this month . But I keep forgetting you are under the impression that she has no feelings ;

Oh , she can feel alright . She feels a great amount of love . Which just happens to be for her one and only - You . But just wait , soon it will be gone . You keep killing her love with all of this pain you inflict . But she won ` t give up ; In her mind , she recalls a time when you once told her , " True love never gives up . "

Looks like you , Mr . Almighty , made a [ huge ] mistake in saying that - Because just like every other lie you tell her , she takes it to heart . She has a heart you ask . Yes , yes she does have a heart . And call me stupid , but I believe for the past seven months it has belonged to you . I know Hun , it is just so hard to imagine . . .

So there is my two - cents , plus another twenty eight . You see that pay phone over there ? Yeah , that one ; Use it . Be sure to call for a taxi far , far away from here - Or to call and tell her once again , you just can `t make it for dinner tonight . She will have to call the best Italian restaurant in the state , and make up another excuse . " The babysitter is sick , or something like we just aren ` t up to it . " Either way , use it wisely . It may just be the last lie she can take .

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jade

    I have no words!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    that just moved me on whole other level!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Ares

    Really amazing poem! I fell in love with it:)

  • 16 years ago

    by dora

    Wow.. that wa so deep and powerful. lot of emotion coming through. 5/5 xo

  • 16 years ago

    by Stephanie

    Oh yes; I'm about to break it down. Haha. Okie dokey, here we go::

    "Sometimes , we trick ourselves into believing things are not real . And we always find out too late and a few drinks later"
    ^ I actually laughed when I read these two lines - Oh, it really is irony for me. :X But I do love these lines. They were beautifully worded and they opened up the poem perfectly.

    " Still , she chases after him . She just can ` t help it . . ."
    ^ So simply worded, yet words are like bullets and these words really hit my heart when reading them.

    "Still , she allows him to break her heart - Kiss her like she truly matters , but within moments he will walk away as if there lips embracing meant as much to him as that guy who took his order at Burger King a few hours back . "
    ^ I absolutely adore these lines. Perfection - topped of with a touch of sarcasm. (:

    "Well , sweetheart , I would like to share my two cents with you - Actually , make that thirty . If you do not mind I have a lot I would like to say : You laugh as if it is funny , when really , it is the saddest thing I have seen this month . But I keep forgetting you are under the impression that she has no feelings ;"
    ^ This whole stanza was amazing. When reading it, I felt so much anger and sarcasm radiating off of every word. Beautifully done.

    "" True love never gives up . ""
    ^ I love how you placed this quote in there -- Very true. >.<

    " I know Hun , it is just so hard to imagine . . ."
    ^ The use of the word 'Hun" was like a slap in the face to this person to me. (: Amazing.

    "Either way , use it wisely . It may just be the last lie she can take . "
    ^ Oh my... you are wonderful. Lol. This was absolutely spectacular. I mean it. So sad and heartbreaking. Phenominal job, m'dear. (: Overall: 5.5

    - Steph. <3

  • 16 years ago

    by Romancing the Darker Side

    "but within moments he will walk away as if there lips embracing meant as much to him as that guy who took his order at Burger King a few hours back ."
    Amazing line. that's my favorite part of the entire poem.
    I really liked this poem, I loved the dripping sarcasm. I also loved the style of it, with all the elipses and quotes.
    I do wish however that you would have broken it up better. Separate your lines, and make well-organized stanzas.
    Other than that, I really loved the sarcasm and feel of this poem. Fantastic write. =]