The Darkest Harmony.

This is a good write keep it up

I like the title! very well written! 5/5
keep up the good work! although u can spend some time sort out the orders of your stanzas to make things more mysterious for readers...

hav a good day!

"Hold on to your dreams" she said,
"There is always hope for love"
I waited and waited, believing the fed lies.
Feeling my skin gently fade.

^^ Starting with the most popular line of advice, given to a broken heart. This kind of lets the reader, me, know that you don't want, or need such advice. It is a lie and one you have heard so many times before. Basically, shut up and read my scorn! *Fab!*

Men I met, all victims of circumstance,
Of oppression and dying mothers.
Of an unjust system and cheating wives,
Victims of their own crimes.

^^A clear message to men and their excuses. They don't and won't wash with me and anyway you deserve your pain. I certainly don't deserve to wallow in your self pitty! *go girl!*

"I love you," so many times heard,
Spat at me with disgust.
Only words tailored for a wanting ear,
I always recognized a hidden lie.

^^Hash, but I can see your view on this. I like the way 'I love you' is delivered in a globule of saliva. Disgusting image! *well done!*

Pity these dying ideologies,
Truly malevolence masqueraded.
Hope expired tonight at last,
Unveiling reality as its true demise.

^^I really feel the hope for mankind seeped away with this stanza. Dying, malevolence and demise. Reading these words literally sucks the love from me. *Please stop, you're killing me!*

Alas! Light shines blindingly in this hole,
Without hope, love or desire I will endure reality.
My love left unrequited, unreciprocated.
Reaching the darkest harmony within my essence.

^^Too late! This last onslaught twisted the knife to sever the final blood giving artery.*Dead*
This is an extremley dark and powerfully disparing piece. Although it is exaggerated, it is exactly how we feel when love ends.

Michael 5/5
P.S Mr Darcy needs love too!