First of all title is great, it is truly eye-catching and original.
have a mind of their own
playing childish games
hopscotch and telephone-
^Very direct opening lines, they amazed me, each line posses so much creativity and interesting descriptions.
-Days when we were younger
shooting the cool breeze
back before my heart got this way
back before the rain-filled freeze-
^This is very refreshing, I admire the compact construction of this picture, you said so much with little words.
-Skipping down the lane
friends, arm in arm
but friends are blind, don't you see?
blinded by my witty charm-
^Another incredible stanza, it is so detail and it kept my attention with each word, third line have such powerful twist.
-Reader, did you forget?
how The End doesn't mean it's done
just means it was a happy pause
with heroes riding into the sun-
^Simply breathtaking lines, I really can feel so much emotions in them and you expressed your message here on great way.
-Oops, did I just ruin it?
Did I tell you fairies aren't real?
perhaps another shattered innocence
tell me, how does that make you feel.-
^Here this is a tone of depression which added even more effect to the whole atmosphere, you wrote this without metaphors and it is still pure mix of great poetic beauty and great sadness.
-Hope you aren't devestated
when I tell you the things you used to play
were only the stuff of dreams
and makebelieve always goes away-
^devestated should be devastated
Anyway quite impressive write, it holds so much sorrow and you truly wrote it with amazing originality.
-So open your eyes, Reader
and watch your innocence tear away
and now reality fills that void
and, honey, it's here to stay -
^Usually word -honey- in poem truly truly make me to hate whole piece cause I dislike that word here you fascinated me! So beautiful ending, it is so remarkable and you left very impressionable impression on me, I absolutely love it, you did excellent job with expressing emotions through narrative rhythm and each word is on the perfect place.
Overall I admire your style of writing, subject of this piece is so different from most poems which I read and I think that you wrote whole poem fantastically. This really deserves contest nomination, bravo!