Rara Avis

I love this poem by far!! KEEP WRITING HUNNI! I LOVE IT! 5/5

Ooh a unique title, love to see a new title in a love poem.

Charred thoughts of those moments arise,
trigger nerves;
shivering, trembling.

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I love this first stanza because It's relatable and pulls the reader in, intriguing them to see where this will go off to.

A phobic feeling crosses the mind,
left in trance;
amorous, stunned.

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An excellent choice of words which made this flow very well, a very unique structure I have never seen before.

Filled with joy beyond comparison,
hearts of gold;
fulsome, frisson.

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Loved the emotion that was set behind this stanza followed up by another extraordinary choice of vocabulary complimented by a nice comparrison

Hobson's Choice is the finale,
one gladly performed;
love, delight.

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Thanks for the definition of "hobson's choice" was refreshing to see a phrase I had not know before, But it seemed to lack a certain something that the other stanza's had, just kinda didn't fit the mood.

Oh, what a wonderful feeling.

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A very simple but perfect ending to this poem though Kept to the flow and inflicted a lasting impression.

Overall I loved the structure of this poem, it was very unique. It had a great flow and was saturated with emotion. I enjoyed the fact that you didn't try to rhyme every word, It gets old every once in awile. A very refreshing add to the love section. 5/5 great write keep it up.

Oh how sweet!

Aww i hate reading short poems.. makes me feel unsatisfied especially if it's a good poem...
damn girl ur good.. ilabschu already =] ur cue too.. loll

Oh, my! What a unique style to this piece. You said so much with so little. The third staza almost broke the flow, but it still worked. Good work for someone so young!