Hand of Sorrow

I am going to be honest with you
i have no idea what this poem is about.
my brain got lost with all the big words. but thats not necessarily (sp?) a bad thing. you used a lot of descriptive wordsand thats what makes your poems absolutely great. so i cant rea;;y say much about this one since i got lost

Cosmos's
`I don't think you need the other s. Words like that normally just have a ' and that's all it needs.

-Inhale gentle voices of fallen stars
when the sun burns us down,
we'll travel far...
`Definitely my favourite stanza. It stuck out instantly -- though it contained the simplest words in this piece, it's potent. I take it in as ... "inhale" being finally taking in and acceping the voices from before -- the fallen stars being betrayals or anything along those lines. Loved ones, family, friends that are no longer in your life -- and the sun ... It hasn't fallen -- it's not gone yet, but there's a prediction of it shattering you sooner or later, but no matter what -- you (and the person since it's "we") will continue on despite the strife.

I also like the repitition of "falling apart, falling apart..." -- the second "falling apart" in my head comes as a powerful whisper ... Amazing.

So overall, I've come to the conclusion that you are one cor writer. This piece, like many others that I've read by you, is about as unique as it gets. Your diction and your metaphors and analogies are breathtaking. You never cease to blow me away, and this piece, did just that.

..__MiNDYY

It was the structure of this poem that blew me away. The whole layout was the best i have seen so far. Although to be fair some of the language was a little out of my depth =P.

But that does not mean this poem was bad in anyway. The vocab you used was jargon and really was well thought out.

Again the flow was flawless as was the meaning of the words you chose.

Although this poem was pretty abract again there were some real strong clashes of metaphors making the poem fierce and tempting.

'Inhale gentle voices of fallen stars
when the sun burns us down', Was my favourite. Really in depth and strong, bold. Showing a binary oppostion in your work shows the quality of how well you write your poems. Exellent job keep up the good work

Alex xxx

Each poem of ur's has it's own touch n class...

marvellous talent...

keep up d good work..

best wishz..

karan

Amazing. Truly blew me away. Wow.

As you can see I reallly liked this piece. The words used were as always out of this world and refreshing to read. The emotions expressed here were impressive and your truly took me into another universe with his poem. The flow was flawless as always and I am really running out of words to describe your work.

Amazing. That is all I could think of.
Well done *5/5*