Wow, this poem is just great!!
I like the sequence of this poem..
and the story that I imagined while reading this!
5/5

I liked this alot. I could actually close my eyes and see this in my mind. Wonderful poetry. Very imaginative. Keep up the excellent work.

First, I'll comment on your format.
Earlier, I thought it was nothing special.

But I LOVED how it sounded when it came out my lips.

This is perfect for the stage.

These are my interpretations,
But, why do you have...
Eternal sleep and death in there?

I mean,
How I saw it was...
You're just trying to fall asleep.
Hynotically talking to yourself.

So when I saw the "enternal" and "death"
It threw me off.

I don't know.
Probably interpreted wrong.

The style of writing alone was a 5/5- very unique
then the way you made the reader feel such different emotions peacful and happy
then sad and dark
this was just amazing
5/5

I loved the poem and the description you used, I felt a world spinning around in this poem and the confusion within 5/5

Beautifully written. This poem was strong, as in it concentrated on a single mood and filled the reader with it. It was calm and haunting, in the deepest depths of memory. Wonderful wording. This poem is also very well structured; you put the line breaks in all the right places: it's not irregular, thus it's not intense, which adds to the mood and feeling. Well-broken stanzas, they add up like a pyramid, eventually reaching the misty peak...

The only thing that irked me about it is the word "bears". It's odd to use in a poem that speaks about reminescence, regret, and a hope long passed away.

Waw
first i love the title its perfect
second what a beautiful poem realy its comfort me ,i enjoy reading every single word and its simple touch of heart
full of love .
you did a great jop well done 5/5

Wow! this is intense passion the flow is very nice with a metaphoric depth in can really get into

Left me speechless.

i imagined it all,as if it was happening

Totally mind blowing. . . . . . . . . . . . . No dobt 5/5.

This is amazing! All of your words in every line were so strong and powerful. You got me caught up in the poem, and created an image in my mind. I love your title and your whole poem was unique and creative. By the way, recognise should be recognize. Good job!

Among the poem you created i admire this one coz i can feel the intense emotions and with its simple ambiance and ideas you painted a perfect lonely poem.. great!!

I love many many parts in this poem. A mix of love and darkness, stunning.
5/5

Cheers xo

You know what this reminded me of? That song in the movie Anastasia... I don't remember the name of it, but this poem really made me remember it. I thought your poem was amazing and beautiful and very unique. =D

I like the way you have written poem that was different than wat i have read .

and the notion of shadows that you used to convey the message was new.
well writeen
5/5

A beautiful dedication, i can see it came stright from your heart. and i loved how you chose your words so wisely.
an amazing write.
job well done.

-Ashlei.