Wow, this is really touching. But I just talked to your dad today... Why did you kill your father?!?! lol I'm just kidding. I know how much you love your dad. I think that maybe the last stanza needs a little bit of work, but that's really it. I think it's great.
Touching. This poem truly expresses the familiarity and distance between two very close people. Does that make sense? It's written in letter format, along with all the little absurdities we include in them that doesn't really matter.
The certain joy in the first five stanzas all dissipated as I reached the last two lines. Wonderfully written, conclusion and all. You've very nearly brought tears to my eyes.
"But he's getting old too, you know."
Overshadowing? When I read your poem over again, I thought I senases a little silhouette of deeper emotion here.
My dad didn't die. I just wrote this poem because I don't really know what I'd do if he did die. I don't even want to think about it. Richie is my dad's little brother; he's 2 years younger than my dad. I dunno. I put myself in the future and this is just how I would probably deal with something like that.
That was so touching. It's like this completely normal conversation and then BAM! You find out all this time you've been talking to his grave. A very touching piece that too many ppl can relate to. Well done with rhyme and the flow was pretty good too!