Suicide is on my mind

This is very sad and shows that you were going through a difficult time. I wish things had gotten better for over the years but I guess some things take time and plenty of it, I'm still trying to forget the things that have happened over the years. It does get easier but we never forget.
I believe the easier option is suicide so you have been very strong not going through it.
It reminds me of a quote: Suicide only puts the sadness onto other people or something like that.
Much love, Em

Below is the poem with suggested changes:

Suicide... I love you.
I think about you all the time;
You're stuck there in my mind.

Suicide... I adore you.
I wish to lay in your out-streched arms.
I want to join your calling charms.

Suicide... I want you
to help me spread my wings and fly
to help me so my tears can dry.

Suicide...Take me.
Here I know I don't belong.
Take me where I can grow strong.

Suicide... Love me
adore me when I'm at my best;
want me and forget the rest;
take me so that I can rest.

It's an interesting style choice. I think I've done something like it before in my "Leave Me Lonely, Leave Me Coldly" poem, though I'm not sure I ever actually posted it. I have a pile of my printed poems, some of which never made it to this site ... a couple of my favorites, too!

As for the topic of suicide, you know where I stand. I don't think suicide is what you need, I think you need to constantly keep yourself on your feet, experience new things -alone or with someone else- and depression will moreso settle in when you let your body tell you it can't do anything. Never listen to your body when it says that, because the truth of the matter is that you can!

Anyway, it was well-written and no doubt at a different point in my life this would have been entirely relatable.

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IdTakeABulletForYou

I really like this poem. It's really cute.=)