Realize

by Wake Me Up   Jun 12, 2008


If your not religous just don't bother reading this
(just thought i would save you sometime by saying that)

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Hands trembling, tears descending,
Feeling that your whole life you may have been pretending,
Heart no quite breaking but, twisting and bending,

Realizing life was handed to you like as free token,
Grasping the fact that He was left slightly broken,
Finally understanding why He was so outspoken,

I fall to my knees,
Trying to understand why He wanted to save me,
Why would He ever save someone like me,

Tears now pouring, forming a small puddle,
My mind now in a muddle,
I crawl to the corner and huddle,

Questions flying, realizing all the pain endured,
Just so that my safety was assured,
Just in case temptation came around and lured,

Thinking of all the truly ungrateful,
Away from Him they pull,
Wondering why even then he treasures us as jewels,

Eyes grow heavy, from so much weeping,
Questions still leaping,
My mind tries to resist from sleeping,

But I feel His gentle hand touch me,
Letting me know that I am free,
As a drift asleep, in his security

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  • 17 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    "Realizing life was handed to you like as free token,
    Grasping the fact that He was left slightly broken,
    Finally understanding why He was so outspoken,"
    `Amazing stanza. The start was okay, but it really picked up here. Awesome rhyme, great flow.

    "Tears now pouring, forming a small puddle,"
    `Forming a small puddle - wow. Great job. I loved this line so much. The way it was worded was perfect.

    "Questions flying, realizing all the pain endured,
    Just so that my safety was assured,
    Just in case temptation came around and lured,"
    `Wow. Perfectly said. But you used just to begin both 2nd and 3rd lines.. set off the flow a tid bit.

    Overall, a good write. The flow was I guess okay. Better than the other poems.. you definatly had your way of words with this one. The rhyme was good as well. :] I'm going to be generous and give you a 5/5 on this one, although the flow could be improved a little.

  • 17 years ago

    by StandStill

    So many nights like this, misa. so many.

    But I feel His gentle hand touch me,
    Letting me know that I am free,
    As a drift asleep, in his security

    ^^ This entire poem, and especially that stanza, made me think of lonetree last year. we had one night that just involved a lot of crying and emotions and finally falling asleep....it was just like wow. *nods*

    great poem. ^.^

  • 17 years ago

    by XDeesxToxicxCookiesX

    I rele LOVED it
    i could imagine n feel every word..
    which makes a rele gd poem..=)
    I love ur style of writin ..x]

    keep it up =D

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