PAY FOR YOUR LOVE

Nothing to be pay but to return the favor of being loved! nice one! 5/5

Ei, i think that poem completely fits for me. love will always be love.

I love it agien you are good at this and have alot of tallent.

WOW that was wonderful!!!! and what i learned is that love is a battle feild!! lolz 5/5

"I look to the stars at night and wonder
why i have this anger inside, this thunder
i feel my heart,sad and full of rage
i fell trapped inside, i feel i am in a cage"

^^ Third & fourth lines -- your I's should be capitalized. Third line -- a space is needed after the comma. The fourth line -- should "fell" be "feel"?

"i close my eyes, for a moment ,i dream
and send wishes in the sky like a beam
i feel the heart talking to someone above
he blame me for he fell in love"

^^ Again, I's should be capitalized. First line -- remove the space after "moment", and add a space after the comma.

"i don't know what to do , i am much in pain
i sit silently waiting , but it is all in vain
this hurt wont be gone , he is here to stay
i enjoyed my love ,and it is time now to pay"

^^ I's should be capitalized. First line -- remove the space after "do". Second line -- remove the space after "waiting". Fourth line -- remove the space after "love" and add a space after the comma.

Overall; This was a very good piece. I liked the meaning behind it. :]

5/5

-Briana