Stone Pillows of Our Czar Reindeer

by Nix   Jun 20, 2008


Injustice takes a photo of the world,
unfolding pictures of her sadistic children
which run between the lines;
still, those are progenies of our Czar Reindeer,
of the one who lead us all, through this clough,
and his wife,
who weaved silky cloak to this planet.

You have whole moon,
can I, at least, get
one crumbled sparkle
to waste it on desponding
above illusions which are parasites of naivety,
changing it into slave bought with loomed sacredness?

Satellites recorded depths of Earth,
against which walk we,
endemic and masochistic;
satellites emit
lacerated viscera of slashed giant panda,
against which we, consequences of provoked atoms,
are riding suicidal drive on back of Czar Reindeer.

So put a head on stone pillow,
and swallow a pill,
let golden production do its job,
after surgery you will feel almost
like you have right to breathe oxygen
with the rest of clones and clowns
with personality disorder,
which, blankly, smile
posing to Injustice.

*Special thanks to the Auzy (the tastless) for the help with the last stanza.
*Special thanks to the Nyell (NyellMoonlight) for the help with some mistakes within the poem

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  • 15 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    "still those are progenies of our Czar Reindeer"- I think that you need a comma after STILL, it would create more powerful rhythm. You should put question mark at the end of the second stanza because you asked a question there with -can I?-
    Here: -let golden production to do its job,-
    it sounds better with -let golden production do its job-
    and the last critique: In the line with "you have right to breath oxygen" breath should be breathe, because its a verb and breath is a noun.

    Those mistakes are minor compared to the power and depth of this piece. First off, I like how you connected beginning and the end of the poem and the metaphors within the whole piece are simply mind-blowing. You created whole new metaphorical world that narrates about the everyday life and the world that we live in. The third stanza is my favorite one, I like the whole concept of it, along with your brilliant choice of words. All in all, this is truly greatly written piece. Remarkable life poem, memorable and profound.

  • 15 years ago

    by Sarah

    ِAs always.. well written and beautifully penned. Great talent 5/5