Another Promise Broken.

Tis poem is sooooo good i loved it you can feel the sadness in the words it left me crying i have to put it on my favorite list

you are a really amazing poet keep it up

Reminds my of when my father passed away shortly after I got married. I was shopping and remember my dad teaching my how to pick out certain products when shopping. I forgot the type of oil he suggested and I turned to my wife and told her to remind me to call my dad when I get home and ask him. A moment of silence passed and I broke out in tears in the supermarket at the thought of never being able to talk to him ever again. In some way, I never found closure and you never do, but in a way this poem seems to help. Thanks for a good read.

Very touching...I felt the last part was more powerful than the last part...

"Two years later i'm still left wandering
Still gazing at our star
How high is your Heaven daddy
Just let me know how far "

^^ aww... so heartfelt... there's so much innocence in those those lines...

loved it..
keep writing..

"She's dying a little more
Just a little day by day
She's going crazy remembering
The last thing you did, the last words you had to say"

^^in this stanza the last line seemed to long. kinda threw the flow off a little.

"She's starting to give up agian
Wanting to be with you agian even more"
^^in these two lines "agian" needs to be changed to "again"

"You were more than a father
You were the person I looked up to
But now who do I have
Who can I turn to"
^^in this stanza it needs a question mark at the end.

"Two years later i'm still left wandering"

^^and i think in this line you meant to put "wondering" instead of "wandering"

but other than those minor mistakes.. your poem was touching. and if its true im sorry it had to happen to you. keep your head up hun. 5/5