A believer

by kate   Jul 20, 2008


You take my breath away.
you touch me like no one else could ever do.
you hold me in your arms at night.
and we begin to kiss., a kiss that tells a story.

butterfly's flutting in my stomach.
every time I see you.
your eyes are green and they get to me.
I love touching you, hugging you.
just being with you makes everything better.

I love you so much more than anything.
words can't speak of how I feel.
but I try to write them down.
to show someone what I feel toward you.
to show myself that I am in love with someone so great.
that this isn't just a dream, this is life.

my life went to downfall to an uprising.
because of you., you made me what I am right now.
It's a great feeling and I thank you for that.
thank you for everything you've ever done for me.

I have the most amazing boyfriend.
that treats me so good, I wouldn't want anyone else.
the only person I need is you right now with me.
holding me and kissing my lips for years to come hopefully.

I did tell you forever and ever.
I promise that, this might not make sense.
but this is what I'm feeling at this moment.
and felt like maybe I should write it down.
maybe even type it out on this website.
and make myself a believer that someone.
so great is out here and he's with me.

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  • 15 years ago

    by InvisiblyHeartless

    This poem sounded like an immature love. Sort of like a 14 year old telling someone they liked them.
    It was sweet and gentle.
    The punctuation sort of halted the images
    Also
    You repeated words very commonly. Spread them out.
    This has potential, just make it live up to it.
    Some changes could be:
    "to show someone what I feel toward you.
    to show "
    Make your repetive selections more creative. Make them stick out vividly instead of dully.
    "your eyes are green and they get to me.
    I love touching you, hugging you."
    Describe his eyes. Describe how his touch feels.
    Things like that will make this from good to amazing. =]

  • 15 years ago

    by Dan

    Fantastic poem. A little critique would be capitalize all the first letters because you do it for a few then stop then start again. Other than that it was great.

    -Dan

  • 15 years ago

    by The Queen

    I believe that writing a love poem is not as easy as writing a sad one but youve done here a fantastic job...A very sweet dedication to your bf filled with so much love and affection.