If You Keep The Sun.

"It's just another scar to the heart
Another bloody remark to the soul
One more cut the the wrist
Just one more piece from the whole"

It's just another scar to the heart
Another bloody remark to the soul
One more cut to the wrist
Just one more piece from the whole

This is a great metaphor for the pain of a kind of rejection whether it is cruel teasing or whatever

"Your words couldn't cut me
Worse that I've already been
That can't hurt me any worse
For I've been dead, and back again"

This to me has the depth of romantic rebirth. The rapid healing of emotional wounds

"I'm just another person
Who can't adjust to this life
I'm one more statistic
Of girls who will soon end their lives"

The endless cycle of light and darkness is that one life style must end to begin another
Unless we are talking about giving in to being buried in desire as apposed to rising like the dawn

I am broken in the fading light
Of a brilliant dying sun
Soon to be completely consumed
The darkness is her only one
The sun is a great metaphor for the truth that the earth cast a shadow on at times

"So tell me am I worth saving?
Or will you leave me here to die?
You'll be just another one to leave
As a silent tear will fall from my eye"

Another twist in this poem with the desire to be saved from sorrow by the fruit of sorrow

Very deep

"One more cut the the wrist"
the 2 the's just dont sound imo.
First of all i must say i'm not a fan of these kinds of poems, their an expression of your feelings but i must think that it's overreacted(i could be wrong tho) but in the end the poems was nicely written, good use of vocabulary, I espacially liked "Of a brilliant dying sun" because it can have double meanings. Now to the structure of the poem, it's pretty solid except that some verses are much longer then others for example from your first stanza:
"It's just another scar to the heart(9 syllables)
Another bloody remark to the soul(10 syllables)
One more cut the the wrist(6 syllables)
Just one more piece from the whole(7 syllables)"
Imo i think it would flow even betterif you could balance that out :).
Good job tho ;)

peac

"Or will you leave me hear to die?"
`Hear should be here.

Overall, this poem was extremely sad. Someone who lives her life with constant struggles and who cannot stand it any longer. I could feel your sadness throughout this poem. The poem contained a wonderful rhyme and flow. Great job. 5/5.