I love the poem, really good job 5/5

Creepy! lol but still great. This poem actually really scares me. But still, its well-written:) Creepy, but great write! 5/5
Loni

Idk wat u do but keep doin it I like this one a lot =) ur a amazing poet 5/5

Wow, that was quite an interesting poem, I got caught up in it and I loved how you ended it. The flow and rhyme was fantastic and so was the form :) I absolutely love the atmosphere that you created with this :) 5/5
~*Angel*~

Great poem! A little shaky at times but still great!

Good poem...extremly powerful

A very unique and intriguing piece. I loved reading it. 5/5

This poem to me was different, but i liked it, it had a nice flow and it told a story, but u told it very nicely

The poem is good but please remember illiteration is key but over doing the same begining word in a single poem draws of the tone and pace if you want something to be sad dark horrifying or even happy you need to be visual in the choice of words and the sheme think of it as a short story cheack out some of my poems exspecially angels and demons the angel the demon or darkend to see what i mean about visualization of the poem

I wonder why death is such a main topic of yours. but i like it.

This poem has lots of hidden meanings...
i love the way you seperated day with night, and made each on its own, but you did not destruct the meaning of the poem!

great write... keep it up

This is nice. Good comparison between day and night

I loved this poem. it was very deep. and quite powerful. sad, yet beautiful at the same time.

By night the vultures seek food
By day the child is taken
By night she is killed and buried
By day she is found

i liked those lines the most, they really stuck out for me. and caught my attention. yet again another great write! job well done. 5/5.

-Ashlei.

I like this one. Absolutely novel and fresh, yet so familiar................

It is a good poem and you have a lot of talent. But some how I felt that I was able to tell what was going to happen in the end. Just seemed you gave a little bit more off for it not to be a surprise end. Well thats just an opinion. Any way very great and well written poem.

Ok......ummm how did u get these many comments?

good poem

Wow. This was interesting. I liked it. The use of the "day" and "night" thing was unique. It's like all good things happen during the day and all bad things happen at night, but that's just an illusion. Bad things happen in the day too.. we just don't like to notice them, because we feel say when it's light outside.

This was really good. ^.^

Keep writing!
Cayce

This was okay, I didn't really like the repitition of "by".. but it was a pretty good poem. Good write, nonetheless. Keep it up. 5/5.

Excellently Penned!!!

I like this, it's unique and has quite impressive vocabulary.
The only thing it needs is punctuation at the end of the lines, so then instead of DEATH in capitals at the end, it can be "Death.", it'll make it more effective.
5/5

jess ~