WOW!!!! thatz all i got to say. =D

Whoa, that was really sad. I got the sense that you put alot of thought into it and it really shows.

I,v been there before
i touched that moment
i felt those thoughts
choke to death
: well done <3 X y v ^

O wow. Excellent poem and wonderful use of imagery and deep, powerful language.
I loved the line, 'It is all still there:', because you built up suspense. Thats very good because it makes the readers wonder what is all still there so it gets them involved in your poem and they like it better.

You definitely get a 5/5 for this poem!

Keep up the good work!
-Shannon <3

Oh wow.. This really touched me.. but as i stated in my prior comment, I give the same advice to this one: you might work on the structure of your stanzas again. At first glance, they appear to be unorganized. Usually the first thing a lot of reader's look at is actual structure. I know I tend to look at that before I read the actual poem, and if the structure doesn't appeal to me, sometimes I decide not to read it. A great piece, nonetheless!

A short yet very powerful piece...Every word in it speaks very loudly and strongly of what you really felt inside....I was touched and i could somehow tell what you are goin through...Be Strong...xDD

You dont want to remember what you lost, you don't want to remember the great times., you just don't., thats what i got out of this poem and for everyone it is true. thats just how it is. which sucks. but we cant stop it at least not half you know. but you did an amazing job writing this.

keep it up.
keep on writing.
love always and forever.

I'm really fascinated by the way you write. you have an amazing way with words and how you put them together in a sentence. this poem was sad but very powerful and very relatable by many, i'm sure... an amazing write. i love it. keep writing. you've got a unique gift for it.

Been There & Done That.
Great Job On This Poem,
I Really Can Relate To It.
5/5!

This poem was extremly touching and real. I think so many of us can relate to this feeling so cleary and well. This was a very well written poem, interesting format.. But this poem definatly said a lot. It's a very relateable poem. Great work. 5/5.

Yes i do know this pain quite well but i believe im moving on nice write. You seem to have a talent for giving great last lines.

This piece was very well written you really let the reader connect with the emotions very obviously from the heart.

Well I can see that you're better in sadness type of poetry than love. Nonetheless your love poems are good too. I can really feel your emotions. I've been there before. I hope you will feel better soon. tc

EXCELLENT!!! It really caught my attention from the begining, and didn't let go til the end lol. you should write more like this I love it. Especially this part...

"It took you hours long before you realized,
That the water in your eyes are actually tears."

I definetly have!! I love it<3 Great job. again! lol 5/5

SP

Great work i like this one alot

Great work i like this one alot

Yes its happend to me many times andther is always a way out. dont let the chain hold u down.

It took you hours long before you realized,
That the water in your eyes are actually tears.
-- Wow. I don't know why, but I can't get those lines out of my head. :\

I really loved them.

Cayce

This was another great poem. The emotion in the poem was overall excellent and the flow good as well. good job once again.

This was a marvelously written poem, well-deserving of praise. It made my heart-wrench and tears threatened to swell over my eyes. You were able to put in all this emotion and then, without taking away from the poem add in a more specific diction yet only at the end. Because of this, the very beginning of the poem can very well be understood by anyone and then, even more so by anyone who has experienced this loss.

"Has it ever happened to you?"

^I love how you began this poem with a question. It immediately drew me in, and I wanted to read more. The way you put this single line by itself made it stand out and that made it more powerful. The possibilities of the things you could mean, and most of all the pain. The true and bare emotion displayed by the single question is almost like a pause. A pause to allow the audience to completely understand what you mean by the question.

"So lost deep in thought were you ever...
It took you hours long before you realized,
That the water in your eyes are actually tears."

^The first line here was confusing, because it was an unfinished thought even if it ended with three periods. As if you're trailing off, something else grasping you mind. It was a bit confusing and perhaps not as powerful as you may have wanted it. The next two lines were good, slightly cliche but still a good touch.

"A reflection of the sadness from deep within,
A sorrow that's lasted so long, welling up inside you...
You want to cry, scream; do anything that would relieve you of that pain...
And still it continues to hurt, so discreetly and yet obviously."

^This was a great depiction of the feelings and emotion you felt when writing this. The idea and the visuals you were able to explain. It shows the emotion as well as allows the reader to see a clear picture of the suffering and through those actions the real pain. So much it almost seems horrifying. Much like the pain felt after crying too hard.

"You want to break free of the chains holding you back...
However, try hard as you might to escape,
It is all still there:
The sadness,
Turning into ever lasting regret of unspoken words,
Ending in the remembrance of an unforgettable loss. "

^It was powerful. The idea of escape you put into this stanza and then, more emotion as you added in that you can't. The sadness is always there, will always be and won't disappear. Sadness often comes with regret, and all this was very vague and could apply to any such person. It was as if you were mocking us, through the idea of false hope that everyone at one point must have felt. And then with the very last line, you even told us how this applied to you. How the emotion had been felt by you, and what caused it.