That was a beautiful piece although filled with sad emotion..You were very vivid with what you were trying to portray in your poem from the beginning til end..It was shortly written but very powerful and extremely deep although i must say please put a dot after every sentence..lolz..i was just kidding...5/5 for this excellent piece..good job..

I really liked your poem, the format was a little hard to understand but i did like it^^.

It had great rhyme and flow to it. And I felt the emotion you were writing. My only problem with this would be to space out some lines.It makes the material look as good as it reads.<3

5/5

I really enjoyed this. I loved the rhymes. They were very easy to understand and they had a couple twists in them. I also loved your word choice:) Great write 5/5

Yeah i know what u mean..been there and done that..lol.. and i think we all learn from past relationships too..well some people anyways.
i think this was excellent. i enjoyed it. anything that comes from the heart is the best. 5!

That was really heartfelt and i could really understand the raw emotion.
the way you right makes me think of poetry slam with the beating drums and dramatic lights. It was beautiful.

I liked this a lot. It flowed very well, and the emotion was strong. I know in your profile you said your poems weren't written in stanza's, but I feel as though if you put this into stanza's, it would be easier to read. But either way, I thought it was beautiful.

Five out of five. [5/5]

``Briana

This poem is a bit of a mess... There aren't any stanza, ot line seperation, and it's all put in one big stanza. The rhymes are nice in some places, but becuase of the structure, the flow breaks from time to time.
I'd suggest you try to write in a stanza structure way, and I'm sure your poems would look a lot better.

Overall 4/5

I love this the is so much emotion in it I don't agree with Shinobi I think the flow was perfect yes stanzas would have added a depth to this piece but the is nothing in the flow that causes a problem. This poem is very good I would have liked to read more maybe making it a bit longer would be a suggestion?

Great poem, i normally don't like the paragraph style poetry but still managed to catch the rhyme. I love the emotions that are swimming behind your words. I understand this poem all too well. The last line has "I'm", not sure if that's what you meant. Maybe i'm just not catching it. But an outstanding poem. (5/5)

Hey great poem i really loved it, i liked the way you portrayed it and it also had a lot of emotion through it too great work and the flow was great too 5/5 :)

Very straight from the heart lyrical poem
I feel the emotion and can totally relate
5/5

Hurting someone doesnt just hurt the person, it hurts urself too and i love how u pointed that ou in this poem. it was really well written and had alot of good ways of making the person wanting to read on good job :)