Comments : The crime of innocence

  • 12 years ago

    by Heba

    OMG.Zahra I am speechless.What a wonderful pıece.It was really sad and so touchıng too.I know how these chıldren suffer because of wars and wrong polıtıcs but I hope our world becomes better.

  • 12 years ago

    by Saving Grace

    I am just...simply speechless. this is so powerful and sad. Its an amazing write. 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by MERCY is never shown

    Great job there is to much war going on and it directly results the children much more than people seem to notice but yes this is a great work.

  • 12 years ago

    by Poe Syndrome

    WOOOW! its such a great poem, it actually brought tears to my eyes.
    its such a shame children have to suffer the consequences of stupid adult decisions. war is never the answer.

  • 12 years ago

    by Annaam

    A very catchy title...
    Sad poem but very well written!!
    The description, usage of words... everything fits perfectly!

    Keep up the good work! :)

    5/5.

  • 12 years ago

    by xX the left behind Xx

    It was sad but it was an awesome write..
    i could really see myself there..nearly brought tears to my eyes.
    keep it up! :)

  • 11 years ago

    by DreamingOutLoud

    WOW; the way you wrote this poem is magnificent.
    I loved the way you tinted the pain through your careful (yet deep) words.
    Little drops of crimson rain; that line got me and "Still he sits calmly through the chiming of wars bell" - and this one brought back memories.

    Love it; a great piece; keep writing.

  • 11 years ago

    by Mikaela DLC

    OMG!

    this is one of many poems that are really memorable.

    beautifully written!

    huhuhu...and it's your fault that you made my eyes teary!!!...

    >>>good job!!!

    ~midz

  • 11 years ago

    by P00ki3B3ar

    Beautiful a very beautiful poem about war
    its perfect one of my favs its flowed perfect
    great job 5/5!

  • 11 years ago

    by victoria

    Speechless. i had that werid tingly feeling all the way to my toes. its so sad to see so many innocent children suffor. war does nothing but cause destruction and lies. they say heaven and hell exisit within the brightest and darkest of minds....i see that hell is on earth. with only the glimpse of heaven that shines. brillant.

    victoria

  • 10 years ago

    by Dominique Lewis

    OMFG!!!! This is terrific! I love it. And I cried too cause someone i know died in the war.

  • 9 years ago

    by Amreen

    Wonderful piece of art...It touches the soul and inspires to pray for the well-being of orphans and those who are abandoned..

  • 9 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Inna lil'llahi wa inna ilayhi raji'un(To God we belong, to him we will return). This is such a heart touching piece, very heart breaking. It's very unfortunate that such pademoniums have engulfed our societies. The masses, wives, youths and children are always victims of such calamities. May the soul of the repose that lost their lives rest in the bosom of The Almighty, Ameen ya rabban alamin. I pray God takes control of this chaotic miseries at His appointed time of Glory and Mercy to us His servants. Written with compassion and breath-taking words. I love the idea you inncorporated in conveying such delicate and sad cases. Flow is good, I'm really impressed, take care. Jazakallahu Khairan, remain blessed. :)

  • 9 years ago

    by Xanthe

    'Little drops of crimson rain
    Restfully dropping right by his side
    Stroking the hair of the mother who died
    Innocence of his eyes glittering through
    The sorrow and sadness of the scene past
    his eyes flew'
    Children don't deserve to see such things,wait.. let me change that.. no one deserves to witness such gruesome sights. These lines kinda made me angry, reminding me of the countless times this has happened and will be happening again. No man should die in the hands of a man. Yes, we all die, but it doesn't have to be like this..

    'Still he sits calmly through the chiming of
    wars bell'
    And this just shows that he's really innocent, doesn't know what's happened and what is happening..

    'A sight of an angel flying by
    His soul carried to the heavens high
    Leaving a precious little body behind
    A sign of the blind war wishing to grind'
    I love how you ended this, but although he's in a better place now, the war is still ongoing.. more innocents' blood shed.

    Really well-penned.5/5 Keep writing!

    -X