A Thing Of Beauty
by xXxemzxXx Sep 4, 2008
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15 years ago
by Krathia
Sweet poem. I advise you on re-working the last stanza. The sudden lengthiness of those lines disrupts the flow and the pattern you've used for 3 stanzas, but everything else is okay.
Keep writing! -
15 years ago
by Nanita
Oh the emotion (: This is exactly what I feel when I'm with my one and only.. I love it!
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15 years ago
Lol..i also think it is very sweet :)
I believe that the flow is not the best..
but that doesn't really matter if the
intention of the poem is like this one..:)
good job!! -
15 years ago
by Not Enough
Another great poem. I think the flow could have been better if maybe you worked on the syllables or something. But, like the person above me said, it has a ton of emotion. Good job
Soda E> -
15 years ago
In this poem I acucally like your use of emotions. usually love poems are mushy or go to far in depth but here you have balanced the scale perfectly. The use of rhyme is good as well as the flow.
My favorite lines in this poem are:
Within seconds,
You'll see me surrender...
The image is so strong there I can relate very well to what you have written. Once again i like what you have done with the punctuation.
Well Written
