Nothing Can Seperate Us

by Roxy   Oct 15, 2008


My heart is starting to grow cold,softening its rhythmic beat.
I lay down and close my eyes as god lifts me from my feet.
Angels whisper in my ears, singing words of another tongue.
They free me from my pain, then I know my life just begun.

As the sun begins to rise,what appears on my face; a smile.
I giggle as they sing in symphony,something I've not done in a while.
I see myself inside a dim tunnel at the end is you; my light.
You guide me through almost everything, you bring back my once blinded sight.

I see you, the angels sing, slowly bringing you closer to me.
Since you left I've been dead, Now I can live in harmony.
How much I miss you, I can't say, there aren't enough words to describe.
Every night I think and pray for you, wishing you were still alive.

God hands slowly reach down towards the Earth laying me on the ground.
This feeling I hold has so much depth, I was lost but now I feel found.
Now I know even if your gone you still live inside of my heart.
I'll love you forever my dear Granddad, nothing can tear us apart...

<3 R.I.P 8/8/2008

I Will Love You Always (:

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  • 13 years ago

    by Love Panda

    Absolutly amazing bunny bee, im glad you were able to write about him. sad times but you always make the best out of it all.

    my heart goes out to you bunny bee. x x x x

  • 13 years ago

    by Nee

    Em I think this poem was really good.
    I loved the wording and your way of expressing your inner feelings was just so sweet.

    I have to criticize one little thing though..your lines are too long I think you should try to shorten them a little..I'm guessing you have a confusion in the length of the line.
    Lets see what I can do :

    You guide me through almost everything, you bring back my once blinded sight.

    Why don't you change this to:
    "you guide me through everything, bring back my once blinded sight."

    Or maybe without the word "once", I just didn't wanna seem like I wanna change the words in the piece.

    "How much I miss you, I can't say, there aren't enough words to describe."

    This one could be changed to :
    "How much I miss you, I can't say, words aren't enough to describe"

    Idk I hope this doesn't annoy you, I'm just trying to help make the poem look better :)

    But I still have to say nothing have lessened the beauty of this piece =]

    Well done hun
    write on
    xx

  • 13 years ago

    by The Prince

    This really moved me..
    =/
    You're excellent, you used brilliant poetic language here, really upset me though!
    I'm nominating it by the way because i haven't felt that way about a poem in a while..

  • 13 years ago

    by Stephanie

    "Since you left I've been dead, Now I can live in harmony."
    - 'Now' should be 'now' ; It doesn't need to be capitalized.

    I love the rhyme scheme that you've chosen to do, it was very effective and it didn't sound forced at all. The flow was nicely done and your word choice was beautiful.

    Amazing job. (: 5/5

    Take care,
    Stephanie

  • 13 years ago

    by cowgirlstar26

    Your choice of vocab was awesome