Will you Please look at me once More?

by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden   Oct 20, 2008


A Quatern is a sixteen line French form composed of four quatrains. It is similar to the Kyrielle and the Retourne. It has a refrain that is in a different place in each quatrain. The first line of stanza one is the second line of stanza two, third line of stanza three, and fourth line of stanza four. A quatern has eight syllables per line. It does not have to be iambic or follow a set rhyme scheme.

Line 1 Will you please look at me once more?
line 2 Laughing so hard I'm on the floor.
line 3 Tears rolling down my happy face.
line 4 The sorrow hasn't left a trace.

line 5 Only in shadows do tears pour.
line 6 Will you please look at me once more?
line 7 Am I as happy as you thought?
line 8 Because inside I'm overwrought.

line 9 With every smile, a tear lurks.
line 10 I want you gone, and hiding works.
line 11 Will you please look at me once more?
line 12 Am I the same you saw before?

line 13 Hurting inside and smiling out.
line 14 I'm someone you don't know about.
line 15 Wounded mind, and a soul that's sore.
line 16 Will you please look at me once more?

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  • 15 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    I've seen this done. It is very hard to do, I commend you for doing that.

    You seem to lose yourself in thought instead of the poem. You lose a lot of what you might have if you were to not pressure yourself into writing this. I felt that the Line 1 etc really took away from it. I know that it was for informational purposes, but it seemed like you were doing it for yourself as well.

    I wish there was some way so that you could explain the style instead of having to put it at the start, it also took away, but I disregarded that.

    All in all it was a very good poem. It is a topic that didn't really surprise me, It's done a lot and it's too bad. I loved the way you put it. and my interupteration of the poem is that it's a person looking into a mirror.

    That is what I love about this poem, it can have so many meanings to so many people.

    Thanks for sharing!

  • 15 years ago

    by Mister 47

    Mm ,will you look at me once more?

    a quest that hold soo much passion and a kind of sadnes at the same time,

    the poem , as a matter of fact lade me feel the sadness of the situation and despite the fact , that it is sad , i enjoyed reading it ,

    and for very big parts of the poem , i can ask the same question to my self , will you look at me once more?

    as usual 5/5