Same Old Story

Oh, wow. Succinct, straight to the point, very well written. Sad yet it is the dreaded truth. A feeling called love, underestimated and overused. your wording was excellent. I loved it.
WakingFreedom

Aww.. this is so sad yet so many people know this feeling and know that pain and you captured it well great job

Awesome job! :0
I liked your choice of words.
the first verse's my favourite. flows nicely.
idk a WHOLE lot about poetry, and i'm no pro,
but if you want more flow, try making the syllables equal one another.
for ex.
this line here has five
and this has four
i can swim and dive
but prefer shore

1st & 3rd = five
&2nd & 4th = four
i kno theres different type &all but i think this one would sound even better more equal.
just a suggestion/preferance i guess :)

keep it up!! :D

Wow, excellent write, I enjoyed it. I think this is better suited as a song, but that's just my opinion. Overall the flow and structure was good. I liked your choice of vocab, nice job. However, I felt it ubruptly ended, I think you could of added a little more to this poem, I just started to get into it when it ended.

I can't stress enough that puncuation in poetry is important. It lets the reader know when to pause/stop reading as well as making the poem flow better.

Overall a good poem, keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

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