To Be Loved By You.

by Courageous Dreamer   Nov 27, 2008


A month ago our once dwindled love blossomed beautifully,
as tints of cherry and scarlet infused color into our lives,
when you asked me through those tear-filled eyes of sorrow,
if I'd let you enter my aching heart for another time or if it was the end.
Receiving that chance to love you again caught me completely off guard,
never had I once believed it was possible for our broken hearts to mend.

Those words sunk into my soul as an instant decision had to be made.
Fear hovered over confused thoughts yet cleared as it was apparent-
that my love for you had not faded after we decided to depart.
A smile crept over my face as dry lips opened, uttering the word "yes."
Knowing your presence existed filled me with happiness, I felt complete.
All I desired now was to be with you one day in your comforting arms.

If it wasn't for meeting someone like you, I wouldn't have experienced
what the true meaning of love was, nor would I have been able to
understand the happiness behind being loved by someone special.
You have taught me what it feels like to be loved unconditionally.
I would never be able to thank you enough for all you've done for me.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Krista

    And this is prrof why you got second place. It was absolutley amazing, and an awesome read. I really REALLY like it.

    <3 Krista

  • 15 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Umm, wow you hit the spot on this one. I can really relate to it. This is how it is with me and my bf. I think I'll show this poem to him. The wording was perfact and full of love. I gave this poem a 5/5. I saw nothing that needed to be fixed.

  • 15 years ago

    by Cyber Saiyan

    I like the dedication at the beginning, it told me you really had feelings for the other person. I would suggest ending the second line with a period and starting the next line from there. With a really long sentence like this one, readers have a hard time focusing on the meaning because they are trying to remember all the words in the sentence. I noticed you started the next line with WHEN, but never finished out the thought. When you start a sentence with WHEN, I expected you to follow up with a closing thought: WHEN YOU ASKED ME, I KNEW I STILL LOVED YOU; or WHEN YOU ASKED ME, MY HEART WANTED TO SAY YES. Without using the second part of the sentence, it does not sound right.

    In the next stanza / paragraph, I don’t think SUNK is the best word. SANK is the past tense and 'sunk' is the past participle. So, "The boat sank in yesterday's storm." On the other hand, "The boat had been sunk for decades." The 'sunk' version will always have other verb-forms attached to it as in the above example we have 'had been'.

    I really love the closing line; it really wraps up the thought.

    Overall, this is a really good poem. A few things to mention, but I love the flow, the use of powerful words like SORROW, CNCONDITIONALLY and ACHING.

  • 15 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This poem has beautiful imagery and your intense romantic feeling were expressed well

    I love a great freestyle flow
    5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

  • 15 years ago

    by Crystal Rose Blooming

    You two are going to make me cry. *sigh* How I miss those feelings. I just love how you expressed yourself. A match made in heaven. God bless you both

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