Architect of my fate

by kelleyana   Jan 1, 2009


Non-rhyming Retourne)

Ocean of dreams is all I see
place to escape from reality
Magical thoughts flowing off mind
Freedom from external control.

place to escape from reality
Where only peace prevails utmost
Heavens shower nothing but love
And all that counts is infinity.

magical thoughts overflow off mind
Stopping pessimism at its hardest
All I have is euphoric feeling
That sets my sailing spirit free.

Freedom from external control
Is what I crave for in my life
Only commander being myself
Thus being architect of my fate.

Retourne: A Retourne is a French poetry form wherein repetition is used, employed. It

consist of four quatrains (four-line stanzas), with each line having eight syllables. The

trick is though that the first stanza's second line must also be the second stanza's first

line, the first stanza's third line is the third stanza's first, and the first stanza's

fourth line is the fourth stanza's first. Retournes can but do not have to rhyme.

Non-rhyming Retourne:

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  • 15 years ago

    by loving my kids tessa and savannah

    Good

  • 15 years ago

    by SashaMirage

    I really loved the title and you expressed it very well. Your words were very beautiful and this poem was flawless. I reread it a few times because it really has this magical feeling that made me feel happy when reading it . I am adding it to my faves too. great job 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Robert Gardiner

    Wonderfully Done, A Well Done Retourne!!!

  • 15 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    Very beautigful write... i haven't tried this form but after reading yours I will surely try it...

    "Ocean of dreams is all I see
    place to escape from reality"

    ^^beautifully penned... dream is a place where we let ourselves free... let our imaginations run wild... and sometimes turn those dreams into reality... these lines display the cheerfulness that I feel when Im in my dreamland ;)

    "Freedom from external control
    Is what I crave for in my life
    Only commander being myself
    Thus being architect of my fate."

    ^^ I found the last lines very motivating ... commander of our fate and architect of our destiny... wonderful lines...

    very enjoyable read :)

  • 15 years ago

    by Bhavin

    Hey Kelly,

    Congrats. I had told you. You are a genius. You have a good chance of winning the contest. Very nicely written. And thanx for making me expertised in Retourne.

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