Ana Vs Him

I woke up this morning with this poem actually in my head, and I had to come read it. This disease had such a grip on me for so many years, and I'm finally starting to have normalcy. Somewhat. Inch by inch. Not only did I struggled with anorexia nervosa, I struggled with bulimia along side of that, but not as bad as some people. It's so hard to overcome and the helpless/hopeless feeling at the end is how I felt for so long. Amazing write.

This sounds very much like you have a voice inside your head telling you things you don't want to hear yet your boyfriend is fighting to show you that you are perfect the way you are. Am I close?

I like how you wrote this. It flowed very well. I especially loved the last line. It made me very much think of things in my life now and in the past.

You have a great talent and you deserve to be recognized. Keep up the amazing work!

Shit gurl! this reminded me of me. how i would hide my tear my true words from the one person who realie tried to be there for me. wow!! thatz was jsut amazing. i enjoy reading every word. it sure hurts me to read someone is going tho sota the same thing but i guess a lot of ppl are. keep it up truly do.
5/5

TaKe CaRe,
frenchy

I absolutley loved it. I liked how your rhyme scheme worked out. I got the feel that she had an eating disorder, and he wants her better? Anyway, beautiful poem. An excellent read. I thoroughly enjoyed it and found no major flaws.

"Once more pounds are chasing me, making me feel so insecure
Don't know how much more self loathing I'm able to endure
Her voice is screaming in my head again, making me so insane
Someone who used to be a friend now treats me with such disdain"
^I love the way in which you wrote the first stanza, because while I had the idea of you speaking of anorexia, it was not concreted until the second stanza (: Also, the flow and rhyme was not forced, but fluid and well written. Pulled me in from jump, and full of emotion.

"On the other side of me there's him, making sure that I'm okay
Trying his utmost best to make sure that I'm not led astray
He doesn't know at night I go to sleep fighting the tears
Constantly anticipating, always waiting for her to appear"
^More fluid and well written rhymes, and a continuance in powerful emotion. I felt the words getting more raw in this stanza, like someone really opening their hearts -- and revealing their fear in this battle they're fighting.

"Weighing myself each day in secret, he can't know of my addiction
Trying to eat sensibly, hide the fact that I'm riddled with this affliction
He's the best thing that ever happened to me yet she's refusing to leave
And with them on opposite sides of me I'm finding it difficult to breathe"
^Strong, and heart-tugging. Though I don't personally know Ana, I think that every girl can find some brand of relatability in this piece, and this stanza really hit home for me. I love the personification, and the acknowledgment that we don't go through this alone, while also representing the inner battle between our conscious and our desires.

"Know that he's right, and that she's in the wrong, she doesn't care
But she's so much stronger than me, leaving me in despair
And everytime I eat she threatens to leave me with Mia
Whispering, "You must get that physique that we both require""
^To me this stanza kind of caved just because the flow and rhyme were not as strong as the rest for me .. however I can still sense the urgency and heart behind it.

"Tried so hard to leave her in the past, don't want her in my life
For all she does is put me down and constantly leave me in strife
Someone I used to trust has now become so frightening
She's got a grip on me, her noose is slowly tightening"
^Again this was not the strongest verse for me, but it holds a lot of truth for people who have gone through this.

"Fought hard to ignore cruel words, for I know he'd be so upset
And I don't want to give in to something that I'll later regret
But as I sit and listen to this war raging on, it's Ana vs him
And I no longer have any idea who is going to win"
^Ah! Ended strongly! I felt the cadence and ease back in this verse. A wonderful, touching, sad and powerful poem. Great job, keep it up!