My Dream Come True Is Only You [Collab]

by BlueEyedMystery   Feb 13, 2009


Extended time has slowly passed by, leaving such confusion
this consuming, fervent warmth I feel for you is no illusion.
I have loved you forever each breathing day growing more
A love so deep inside me, that it tickles and thrills my core.

Longing to be where I belong safely tucked in your loving arms
Breathless I have become blessed with your heartrending charm
Whispers dance around my head, they sound so much like you
Your gentle voice plays in my mind with lyrics that felt so true

Bumblebees hum in my stomach, every time I hear your name
Loving cupid brought our hearts together with such a perfect aim
I want to spend the rest of my life staring into your alluring eyes
Take my hand on this day, I promise to kiss those tears goodbye

You have walked right out of my dreams into my melancholy heart
Mind wanting to let go yet deep inside I have been wishing to restart
Mornings come as nights fall, you are all that my mind is thinking of
Proudly I would shout out to the world you are the one I came to love
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This poem was written by me and my friend Zeenat!
It's a CayZee original! Haha.

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=225708
check her ouutt!

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  • 15 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    "Extended time has slowly passed by, leaving such confusion,
    this consuming, fervent warmth I feel for you is no illusion.
    I have loved you forever each breathing day growing more,
    A love so deep inside me, that it tickles and thrills my core."

    ^^Ahhhh...what a truly beautiful way to open this piece up! Filled with such love and adoration, so much emotion that I'm instantly pulled into the piece and can't wait to read more.

    "Longing to be where I belong safely tucked in your loving arms,
    Breathless I have become blessed with your heartrending charm.
    Whispers dance around my head, they sound so much like you,
    Your gentle voice plays in my mind with lyrics that felt so true."

    ^^This is just getting better and better as I go along. The emotion and depth within this verse is incredible, you really manage to capture the feeling of being in love so beautifully here.

    "Bumblebees hum in my stomach, every time I hear your name,
    Loving cupid brought our hearts together with such a perfect aim.
    I want to spend the rest of my life staring into your alluring eyes,
    Take my hand on this day, I promise to kiss those tears goodbye."

    ^^I love how you used bumblebees, instead of butterflies. I found that to be both original and unique in concept, and made for a great twist.

    "You have walked right out of my dreams into my melancholy heart,
    Mind wanting to let go yet deep inside I have been wishing to restart.
    Mornings come as nights fall, you are all that my mind is thinking of,
    Proudly I would shout out to the world you are the one I came to love."

    ^^This is such a beautiful ending, so sweet and adorable that it left me with a smile, and wrapped the piece up perfectly.

    The flow is beautiful throughout this piece, doesn't falter once, and the words just roll right of the tongue, while the imagery paints vivid pictures in my mind.

    You can always tell when a collab is good when you can't tell who wrote what, as is the case here.

    I hope to see more of you two in the future.

    Beautiful work guys!

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