Memories Will Live On.

"Weak body suffering pain begs for peace,
gasping to catch another gulp of fresh air.
Eyes barely open, struggling to live.
A sharp needle is slowly inserted."

^^The pain, emotion and depth is incredible here, almost overwhelming and pulls me right into the piece, leaving me wanting to carry on reading.

"A tumor formed only continues to expand,
blood flow becomes restricted from the heart.
The end of life is near as tired eyes battle
to live, eventually closing for the last time."

^^This is so sad, I found this stanza to be the strongest of the piece and with each line read I could feel my heart dropping even further in sorrow. The imagery is beautifully detailed here.

"Each beat becomes further apart with time,
eventually coming to a stop, pain disappears.
Stiff body lies in peace, family surrounds.
Tears flow, residing with memories of the past."

^^i found this stanza to be incredible..the fact that you mixed such melancholy with such tranquility caused for a stunning effect and I really liked how you described that even though it's painful, he/she is now at peace and there's no more pain.

As an animal lover I know how much it hurts to lose a pet and wouldn't know what to do if anything happened to my current german shepard..stay strong!

So touching...

"Each beat becomes further apart with time,
eventually coming to a stop, pain disappears.
Stiff body lies in peace, family surrounds.
Tears flow, residing with memories of the past."

^^ these lines reminded me of how horrible i felt when my dog died ... the times that we had shared are still cherished by my family ... its strange how they make a strong connection with our heart ...

"Seconds turn into minutes..."

^^ the small halt in between expresses the pain even more beautifully ...

very heartfelt write ...

Omg I started crying.
I know what its like to lose a pet.
Im so terribly sorry Temps.
Be strong.
Excellent poem girl.

Very sad Temps...you wrote a beautiful tribute for your dog.
Only a person who owns pets knows how deeply they are loved and how much it hurts when they die.

I wish you lots of strength for the weeks to come.

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid