Waitin' on Sunshine

The last line gave me quite a chuckle. Very clever writing, Sylvia - Nicely done :-)

"Waitin' on sunshine so bright.
nothing but rain in sight.
Clouds overhead, dreary day,
smile, come what may."
`Great flow & rhyme as well as a tint of imagery.

"Waitin' on sunshine so bright,
sunny days a nice delight.
No good news, it's gettin' bad.
hard workin' people are mad,"
`Really unique interesting form, a great deal of repetition, but it works well with this piece. I really like how you used a bit of slang.. it worked just fine.

The rest of the poem was wonderfully written, need I say more! :] Great message, too!

5/5.

Temps [Beyond a Poets Mind]

Sylvia,

I see a poem here with a message - one that is being said loudly.

Politicians speak alot and their words are carefully chosen to please the majority vote. This is a tried and tested method, yes? However, if they fail to hear the voters who often don't shout out they could find themselves in hot water and out of office.

Well done on this poem.

Michael

If only we could pull the lever, dear Silvia...but what real power do we have?
Go on strike, refuse to buy certain products, vote for the one who looks most honest?
I have seen enough already to know that all Obama is going to do is increase the US national debt, mr. miracle man, heh!
(But I do think he was the best choice, considering the alternatives)

Nice, deep one;)

*hugs*

5/5 Ingrid

Sylvia
The sunshine always seems to make everything better.
Good job!
Love Cindy