When the Sun Goes Down

by The Queen   Jun 1, 2009


As my eyes yawned to a beckoning dawn,
And vanishing tranquility
-of moon's magic charm
Strangers' voices begun echoing,
Across the horizon twinge
-As drowsy footsteps opposing
To labor of sunlight hours that never ends.

Forget not, the apathy of sun rays,
-Even if your lungs get stung and burnt.
Engulf the spineless cell of your being
Dream you may, only of twilight charm
For when the sun goes down,
That's where happiness resides,
- All the cries of anguish to hide.

Behind the shifting clouds is a place
-of rainbows and butterflies
Where tears are gathered,
To -water parched eyes,
Where pains besom wide,
-The tormented hearts.

And if burdens shall prevail
-Against the burning ball of fire,
Commit to memory,
- Of a lover's fiery kiss goodnight
Underneath the heady scent,
-Of twinkling leading lights..

Soar High.. My darling,
-Beneath the cascading beauty of a clear night sky.
Submit your fears, as the sun goes--down.

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  • 13 years ago

    by momopixie18

    There were some parts that really caught my attention and i thought you worded it so well, there were other lines where i got a bit bored, and your message i didnt get, but i loved the ending.

  • 14 years ago

    by Deana

    Behind the shifting clouds is a place
    -of rainbows and butterflies
    Where tears are gathered,
    To -water parched eyes,
    Where pains besom wide,
    -The tormented hearts.

    I love this stanza, it created images of a beautiful place...even if it is within the mind...excellent!

  • 14 years ago

    by East Poetry

    I cant find the message that your trying to portray here, Its like your throwing in too much. I get lost with in it.

  • 14 years ago

    by HvN

    I haven't read a poem that has made me feel so calm as this one. Your word choice was beautiful and the ryme scheme was fantastic. A very creative way to express such incredible feelings.

    5/5

    keep up the good work!

    HvN

  • 14 years ago

    by XxFallenxFromxGracexX

    Very well written, it was a beautifully written poem, it flowed well and had depth and emotion within it.
    great poem
    5/5
    xoxo

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