It's over

Thank you so much Khalid, i appreciate you help

Great piece! However I do have some points which I guess important for the poem.

Every thing is over after a sweet love story
You know ?
"Every thing" should be one word as "everything". There should be a comma after "story". So the stanza should read as:
"Everything is over after a sweet love story,
you know ?

That's so hard to believe
Cause ,

This part should read as:

"That's so hard to believe, cause:"

We were like the best couple in the old stories
But we become less than ordinary one's
"But we became..."
You promised me that you will never let me alone

But i become the most lonely person in the world
"But I became..."
I planed a future full love and happiness
"full of love..."

But i face a present full pain and sadness
"But I faced a person full of pain...."
I thought that everybody could be change except you

"could change"
But i discover that nobody change except you
"But I discovered that nobody changed..."

I guess that this poem can have excellent impact if the necessary chages are made.
But even though I really enjoyed your work.

I love it girl ;)
some times we are petrayted by the most closest person to us but it's life if we don't get hurt we will never know the truth about people that we thought they are our mate

Very powerful write 5/5

Loved it

A stranger,
Alvaro