Lost Son

Brilliant poem, another very intelligent and thought provoking write

"How many times must I get lost before I'm
safe in heaven?
While the Father bids me to forgive seventy times seven
All I ever whated was to be loved for who I
am
Praying to the Spirit so strong, yet meek as a lamb"

Very powerful words that get the reader thinking and strike them with question. Just one thing though, in the third line, "whated" should be "wanted". Otherwise, a entrancing opening to introduce your thoughts and feelings.

"Once I had a fortune, but that's been gone so long
All I care to do is write in rhymes and sing a sad song
When there is nothing left there is nothing left to lose
Though it is a hell of a fate for anyone to choose"

Brilliant write so far, the message here is incredible and your words portray such meaning.

"The only thing we really need to know
is a season will arrive and another will go
The beauty of summer the fall cannot take,
as after each winter everthing must wake"

Such sage words, I really enjoyed reading "the beauty of summer the fall cannot take", so true are your words.

"So when you're down and out it is a good time to look up.
To see if there is anyone up there willing to take your cup
Even if your cup seems empty, it won't always be that way
If you put your trust in the Son to give you another day"

A powerful ending that strikes hope and wise advise into the reader's mind. Indeed a brilliant write, well-penned. 5/5 from me.

Take care and God bless you!

~MaryAnne