by kelleyana Sep 11, 2009
category :
Love, romance /
lasting love
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Observing the cloudless blue sky that gleamed its light on me,taking my heart to the right direction it always wants to be. Its warmth quiver the mood and my humor a pure delight. |
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Exquisitely Penned, A Splendid and Fanciful Write!!! |
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I thought it was really hmm... to find a word for it would be hard. The one that is most closest to beautiful...yet even more beautiful...like the beautiful of the beautifulest. If that makes sense. 5/5. Keep up good work. =] |
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I like to comment, but theres no more i can add. But to keep it up. |
by Hollymariee
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Since some of the lines rhyme, maybe you would want to seperate your stanzas into four line verses ? It would make it a little easier to read . And there are also a few grammar mistakes .. But thats a minor detail. I really like the content of the poem as well as your wording , you make it very easy to relate to , but also very personal . Very well done , 5/5 |
by Lady Nik
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This was a lovely poem dear, I felt that you put alot of emotions into and told a very common story. I don't read many love poems but I enjoyed this one. It was done well and it wasn't sappy and cliche. I love the imagery and your original ideas. A very strong poem. Keep it up hun. Nik |