She's the girl who always seems perfectly fine
No one notices her emotions beginning to cross the line
Look past her smile and she if her eyes still shine
Theres not much left to do she's given her final sign
The girl aways so bright is running out of time
She's starting to fall after this miserable climb
Are you going to miss her as she silently slips away?
Did you know her last day was going to be today?
She slammed her door and fell to the floor
She scream to her empty house, "I CAN'T TAKE THIS ANYMORE!"
She finally gave in to her suicidal thoughts tonight
Stupid people, everyone though her future was so bright
Tears running town her face she reached for the gun
After all this pain it was time for some twisted fun
The trigger daring her to pull it to end her crying
After the years of torment she was finally dying
Other than a few minor misspellings it was very good. I can relate to the feeling. I'm like victoria I always enjoy a 'depression or suicide' poem. You paint such a vivid picture with your writing it's like it's happening right in front of me.
I also found out while reading this, I can not listen to music and read and comprehend a poem at the same time.
Wow...extremely forceful and deep. I never get tired of reading about "depression or suicide" or whatever falls under thoughs catorgories. Well written except for a few miss spellers but hey...i got the point.lol. great job!